W.A.L.T. Use show not tell. In Room 6 we have been learning to use show not tell. Our task was to choose a feeling and use show not tell. Can you guess which feeling I choose? What I found hard was trying to find other ways to express the feeling that I choose. What I found easy was writing out the sentences. Maybe next time I could try and add more to my sentences and add more sentences.
As I steadily walked onto the stage, I could feel my heart pounding, now it was racing, it felt like it was trying to escape my body. I didn’t know what to do. So very calmly I went to grab the microphone, and as I gently put it closer to my face I could feel the sweat dripping from my head. By now I could smell my sweat, as I casually liked my dry lips I could taste my sweat that dripped from the top of my head to my lips.
Hiya Atalina!
ReplyDeleteThis piece of writing is very good. I have a feeling your writing is about being nervous ? Maybe next time you could check your spelling ( you said liked instead of licked!) I like how you have implied very well and also that you haven't directly stated that you were nervous. You have used very descriptive language. Again this is a great piece of writing! Did you have a plan for this piece of writing ?
- Nikita